these are the original words for the poem. For some reason, i didnt like it and changed it to the previous version (that can be seen here)
its been a tough day
running from pillar to post
i am scarred by you
and i do not know what to do
got to go shopping
got stuff to do
got lots of things to do
and i do not know what to do
all alone with the tv blaring loudly
i hear nothing except the words you said
i pick the phone to call you right away
then i realize i dont have your number!
can’t believe i would fall again
can’t believe it would come to this
can’t believe my dreams would be filled by your thoughts
and i end up waking up wanting to see you everyday!
It’s a shame the weekend is two full days
two full days of living like a fish out of water
like a full moon on a black night sky
even in darkness your face is what I see
i don’t care who you are!
i don’t care what you did!
i don’t care about anything else!
except your present and our future
i miss you, i love you
with thoughts of you tattooed in my mind
with my words screaming your name
rescure me darling, do i have to say the words?
7 comments
i dont see any reason why u didnt like it.. it’s good really!
You almost dialled her number in some post but didnt and now you dont have her number at all??? something fishy i say 😛
raji,
its just that i thought its very broken and i wasnt happy with the outcome
blindwreck,
the other one was written a long long time ago.. maybe even 2+ yrs ago.
diff times, diff person 🙂
see, u r thinking a lot 😉
now that really makes me think a lot!! hummphhhh!!! 😉
This I feelnis very different from your usual work I like it a lot you really let the reader make their own imfrences I’d like to email you and ask you about your inspiration and technique
u write really well n in a way that anyone can understand easily.
The flow of emotions continues till the end n after end it does not allow us to stop thinking abt it………
I luv to read your poems though am new to internet or online poetry.
rdgs,
raj mawat